There is some serious suckage in this story, the fourth under the "two stories a month" plan. No doubt about it. But it seems like there might be a bit less suckage than in "Breaking In", which might have had a bit less than "Real Space", which might have had a bit less than "Real Enuf 4 U" (which had a whole lotta lotta suckage).
Perhaps the percentage of suckage is decreasing. Oh so very slightly, but decreasing. That's encouraging.
Now I have to figure out what to enter into Writers of the Future, as the deadline is December 31. I think I'll run a poll! Poll coming soon.