jeffsoesbe (jeffsoesbe) wrote,

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finished "The Fishing Trip"

Finished the first draft of "The Fishing Trip". I don't like the ending. I think it's the right ending (Daryn stays, he doesn't go), but I don't like the way I did it. Short summary is: too much tell, not enough show. Long summary is: when does he make this decision? How do you show that he's made this decision? What was the decision?

By the end, he was also a much more active character than in the beginning and that's something I need to bring into the entire story in the rewrite.

There's more work to be done on this one. But I do like the core of the story.
Tags: fishing trip, writing

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