It was both thrilling and terrifying. I tried to pretend I was someone opening the packet for the first time, to see what their experience would be. I think it worked. I still chuckled at a couple times in the story. I think the ending worked. Of course, I'm horribly biased.
In the end, I like the story and it felt good to send it out into the world. We'll see how I feel after I get a response. :-)